environmental policy

mythos – Your thesis is that environmental policy should take into consideration the cultural practices of the people living on the land. Is that your position?

Some of the information you start to dig into here can be used for your logos. Did you look up specific cultural practices? Quote from those sources and stick them in your logos section.

I’ve highlighted places in your essay where vague language needs to be replaced with concrete language.

Here, for the mythos, the best thing you can do is create one specific snapshot of a specific person reacting to a specific policy that impacts their cultural identity. For instance ” When my Uncle Joe found out about the order to stop tilling his fields, he was mad. The farm has been in the family for 40 years and we’ve always tilled the fields. The rules about no-till farming were disrespectful of what farmers know about the soil . . .” . . .therefore, culture should be considered when making policy.
logos- The logos section is for you to work on incorporating factual information into your essay. You are using APA format correctly. You have correctly summarized and cited information from your atticles. All of that is good news!

Do you remember back in February when we were working on paragraphs? I was trying to get you to combine a specific “snapshot” with a general statement about why the snapshot was important? The same is true for this longer essay.

Your logos section is full of general statements, like “cultural input is necessary for good environmental policy.” Let’s start with that as your general point you want to make.

In order for your reader to “picture” what that means, though, you still need to provide *specific* information. What does “cultural input” or “good policy” look like?

You may have examples in mind. I went ahead and pulled an example from the recent news so you can see what I’m talking about.

A Canadian oil company wants to pipe crude oil across parts of the United States. The pipelines they use have a history of spilling oil, which damages local (American) soil and drinking water. Native American peoples who live on this land do not want their land and water to be contaminated. The Sioux Tribe has been asking for the pipeline not to cross their land. The Canadian company has been ignoring them.

According to your general claim, the policies around piping crude oil ought to take cultural input from the people whose land will be impacted, right? Here are two recent articles that talk about the lack of cultural input. They would be a great example of a specific case where cultural input is needed.
ethos- Is there anything else you have been moved to do because of your research? I know some people decide to eat less beef when they find out about bad farming practices, or make a commitment to always vote for good policies. Is there any personal aha! moment like that that you would like to add?

I’d like to see the revised in-text citations for your logos section. Once that is in good shape, you can put your three sections together and turn in the whole essay.